For class I have to write an Italian (Petrarchan) Sonnet with these standards:
ABBA ABBA CDCD EE rhyme scheme
syllables per line
lines: first introduce problem, last provide solution
my teacher didn’t say anything about iambic pentameter, so I don’t think that matters here.
I wrote this, but I know it’s awkward and needs revising.
Obesity is leading cause of death
Burger King, McDonalds, Wendy’s as well
Ordering apple sticks topped with carmel
Sodium, heart disease, you’re out of breath?
High blood pressure generates heart attacks
Type diabetes rise from fat gain
and you know what they say, no gain no pain
Arteries clogging from build-up of plaque
The things needed most are veggies and fruits
Exercise for a healthy lifesty’le
Get off the couch , put the TV on mute
Go for a run maybe even a mile
Eating fast food will take days from your life
That’s thy notion on obesity strife.
(T’is thy thoughts on the obesity strife.)
haven’t decided which to use for the last line ^ ^ ^ ^
and yeah, I know it’s ‘no pain no gain’. I was just making wordplay.
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Strange, this looks familiar…
It reads like the work of several authors cobbled together.
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