The music is the mourning, silent cries,
The passionate heart’s divine melodies
To lift the silken veil of hypocrisies
The nets that the soul into evil entice.
A fiery Hell amongst a paradise
Of flowers blue and gold, like memories
Unfaithful, that the beauty shall increase
Until above wordly cares my soul can rise.
And if the faithful turn truly faithless
And beauty were evil, I shall not bend knee
Or forgive the foe until seven times seven.
And if my soul must suffer measureless
My tears shall turn to gold in holy alchemy
And my soul, an earthly piece of heaven.
It is in the classical sonnet form…..
Tell me what do you think about it?
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This work is full of abstraction, and oddly enough little music, which is counter to the very meaning of sonnet.
“As with any metre, it is not necessary that every line should be entirely slavish in following the rhythm; in fact, being so could make the poem sound dull. Swapping, dropping or adding stressed and unstressed syllables will lend variety to a line without changing the underlying rhythm.” *
Tim Steele’s “All the Fun’s in How you say a Thing” may be a good resource as you learn, reading good poems being written in form and meter written today, may help as well.
Etruscans by Susan Gubernat
The woman, wool-capped, filthy, knelt beside
a man asleep at the curb, so tenderly—
well, what can I say but that I envied
them in my full belly. I’ve never wrapped
my chest in newspaper or begged for change
with a Styrofoam cup, or slept on the street.
And I welled up with self-pity. I’m safe,
I’m warm, I’m alone. My donor’s card reads:
Take the whole body, the body entire,
leave nothing behind for burial. The stone couples
lean against each other, and in the tomb
a queen’s dust merges with her king’s—the sweet,
the bitter—an apothecary’s mixture
to salve the horror of eternity.
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Poetry does not have to rhyme, but rhythm is important.
You must read as much as you can and as many different styles as you can, classic and contemporary; free verse and structured forms. Two good anthologies: Staying Alive, Real poems for Unreal Times edited by Neil Astley and Garrison Keillor’s Good Poems. Two books on writing that will help guide you are Mary Oliver’s A Poetry Handbook and The Poetry Home Repair Kit from Ted Kooser.
There are many good sites on line where you can read poetry daily or browse the archives:
Academy of Americans Poets
Poetry Daily
Verse Daily
The Writer’s Almanac
Ploughshares
Rattle
Poetry
Poetry Foundation
Source(s): * http://www.poetryarchive.org/poetryarchive/glossar…
http://www.ohioswallow.com/book/All+the+Fun%E%%…
http://www.cortlandreview.com/features//december…
The first and only solid thing that came to mind reading this, was “Dâia de los Muertos”