well here is my poem.. i just want to know if it makes sence to any of u 🙂
Look I know your just lying
and frankly I somethimes hope I could be flying
so I could fly above your head and hit you with a stick
and dont even exagerate cuz ill be fed
and then ill flick
you on the head
and make you make your bed
like really stop ******* around
clean up your act
and grow up
for once just once
cuz then wath after months
are gunna pass
and you know no one is gunna last after
finding out what had happened was
their the cause of how those months were made.
🙂 thanks guys
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I really hope I can help, I am not the best when it comes to “analyzing” poetry and such, but I will try to help.
I think that you have a good meaning, but to me, the wording is a little to generic and bland. If you could swap in some synonyms, and maybe mix around the beginning. The third line to the seventh line seem a little odd. I hope I was able to help, I am not the best with poetry, but i really want to help anyone I can out if I am at least somewhat capable…
Source(s): AP English class…but a little tired so not to sharp at all…and poetry is one thing I want to be good at, but am not at the moment.
It’s juvenile and weak. No, haha it’s actually pretty funny, it needs a better wording, though.
Good
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