I was going through files on my old laptop and I came across this! It must have been at least years ago when I wrote it! Crazy, right? I was a better writer then than now. Well here it is, all critique is accepted, points to the most informative and detailed.
Write, rewrite. Don’t germinate under moonlight
and in my taste, what could the causes be?
Not that there is a problem
but it is love, then loss, then fear, then a sick past
Then, there is no leaving
the spider has woven dark
thick strands of web that will capture its pray
that is of course, if it lives that long
There is a small thread of light
and it peirces through eons of time
that web may lose a bit
but who says happy endings are always pleasant?
And to whom is the ending happy?
This light that has no face, no features, no feelings?
If the spider loses, then what has the light gained?
nothing is planned out that carefully.
wires don’t shock those who want it
those who expect everything experience nothing.
The light wove around the darkened web
and the spider has never caught so many meals.
Whether that was copied and pasted or not, I should probably mention @betty, if you don’t think it’s a poem that’s fine, though your definition is unofficial. I just wanted an opinion on the group of words I constructed when I was .
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Australias leading erotic poet colin leslie dean points out
Nearly all that goes for poetry these days is just prose
Technically you can only call something poetry if it has structure ie metre or rhythm
Free verse is not poetry and those who write it are not poets
read definition of poetry as distinct from prose
”In poetry, metre (meter in American English) is the basic rhythmic structure of a verse or lines in verse “
“The word “verse” is commonly used in lieu of “poetry” to distinguish it from prose. Where the common unit of poetry, that is, verse, is based on meter or rhyme
A verse is formally a single metrical line in a poetic composition”
Free verse is usually defined as having no fixed meter and no end rhyme”
Thus free verse is not poetry/verse and those who write it are not poets as free verse is not in metre-which is the defining essence of poetry ie which makes a writing poetry
According to the standard definition of poetry which defines poetry as being metrical writing or writing that is in metre, free verse by not being metrical or in metre is not poetry and those who write it ie Walt Whitman , T S Eliot etc are not poets. Thus modernist free verse poetry is not really poetry at all but only prose as free verse is not poetry according to the standard definition of poetry ie writing that is in metre